About the dialogue in my works (Patreon)

The story of Trap Video is adapted from my friend kk9700's story. And he also wrote the Chinese dialogue for it. After reading his dialogue, I found the story becomes better because of his text. Then I read my English dialogue again and found that I can't stand the embarrassing text myself.... Atmosphere is very important, I can't write great oral English dialogue without speaking English in my daily life.

I hope some of you can help me with my English dialogue... And you are welcomed to write the dialogue again for my works, including Trap Video. 

I'm really sorry for my bad skills at this... Thank you for your support!