Progress w1 / March - script (Patreon)

So I am working on the next scene, but as promised, I am gonna talk about the script a bit.

SCRIPT EXCERPT  

 https://imgur.com/a/6ZlVrPZ 

Right now with every bigger project, I usually start out with a script. I usually have some idea of the setting and the general situation. First I pick the poses I want to use, because above all, this is porn and good poses are king. I try to pick some interesting ones, trying to use the environment if possible and even try to consider the personalities of the characters (for example in Diner, Ashe and Brig were both very dominant, which gave me the idea for double anal).

I try to arrange the poses so they flow nicely into each other, with increasing 'hardcorness' (teasing into more explicit stuff). 

Then I try to fit the story around the poses, this is a bit of a back and forth where I sometimes ditch or change the poses. Above you can see the snapshot of the script for Corporate Training, you can see it's pretty simple with a preview picture of the pose (I try to sketch out all the poses first to see if they are feasible).

I try to include some cool details I want to include, but also leave room for improvisation. I find that I usually come up with the best stuff while making the scene. You can see that the scene should have started a bit differently, but I figured that the skirt landing on the chair would look cooler and would be faster to make. I also added the part with spitting, I thought it would be a nice dominant way to include Hana in her own 'torture' and would let me show off my cool new wetness shader :D

I also ditched the ending where she undoes her collar cause at that point I just wanted to finish the scene. Yep, I sometimes cut stuff cause they would be a lot of effort for little payoff.

So talking about adding stuff, I usually have to face bunch of unforeseen issues. In this one there is a great example with Hana's hair. I usually animate with the hair turned off, cause it gives me better performance and I can see better. However after turning Hana's pigtails on, I noticed they are clipping into Rebecca's face pretty badly. I tried to move her around and even considered cheating and moving them just for this scene, however then I thought of turning them into a small easter egg.

I adjusted the animation so that the pigtail occasionally gets into Rebecca's face, and then made Rebecca react to it. I started out subtle

The hair just slightly brushes her face and gets in her eye. However as Hana fidgets more and more, Rebecca gets more pronounced 'slaps'. I even asked VA to give her annoyed grunts when this happen. It all culminates when Hana is about to cum and I deliberately made her slap Rebecca across the face with her hair

Then when Rebecca collars her, she's back in control. To reinforce this, I made her dodge the hair, cause she's onto Hana at this point

Anyways, this is one of the many small details that need to be dealt with, I managed to turn this one into something positive.

Let me know what you think and if you even noticed it :D