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Your Feedback Is Important to Us... (spoiler alert) (Patreon)

Published:
2023-03-26 00:22:40
Imported:
2023-03

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(PDF attached... warning that there are two new unreleased pages) 

As some of my best supporters, I would like your opinion on the next pages of "Meet The Littles".  I attached the PDF here with only some placeholder art.

The text has changed quite a bit on the previous pages to match the longer story that I'm hoping to create.

The feedback I would like from you is that the writing style of the new pages shift from a "documentary" style to a more "literary" style.  This makes the story move a little slower much like a comic book rather then the outline form that these Tales used to take.

What do you think?

Also, any editorial/gramatical/spelling errors you spot is much appreciated.  English is like a second language for me and unfortunately, I don't have a first language!  LOL.

Comments

RH

Hmmmm . . . well, I'd say the 'literary' approach is sexier by far. Your example makes LL's intent much more explicit and steamier! LOL. I'd guess that it'll take more time to write in that style. I think this will be great for LL stories but wonder how difficult it would be to do in a story with many active characters...like Doves of Peril? 👍

Anonymous

Yes, I think I prefer this new style. It makes me want to read more of it by making the tale more compelling. I hope you'll stick with this style of writing; every sentence makes me look forward to the next.

sinope
>>104904587

It is actually a little easier to write. The documentary format really forced me to compress a lot of story into very few words and not using dialogue makes it difficult for me to lead the reader along the story line. The quick changing plot points were also tricky to make smooth transitions between. I was thinking the exact same thing with Doves. I’m curious how that would read like this rather then a comic. More compelling?